Friday, 26 April 2013

Literacy homework 26-4-13

Poetry writing

This week we have been learning about poetry and  beginning to write our own poems.
Use what you have been learning this week to write your own poem about a magic box and add it using the comments box to this post.

Example:

I will put in the box
A golden sunrise shimmering on the ocean waves.
The sound of butterflies fluttering in the breeze
The taste of my favourite ice cream
A smile from my baby sister

Now have a go and make your own.


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37 comments:

  1. Elina Bistere26 April 2013 at 15:26

    I will put in the box

    Some crunching ,orange leves from a autumn tree
    Hot, bright, shimmering sun
    Blue, clean, sparkling water from a lake
    Red,beautiful, fresh rose

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    1. johnbramstonprimary28 April 2013 at 10:18

      A lovely poem Elina and good use of adjectives.

      Could you add a feeling or sound?

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  2. FAYE HARPER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!26 April 2013 at 20:10

    i'll put in the box the first smily of a baby
    a white shimrering blue and pink horse that sparkles in the moon light.

    i'll put in the box a green and blue award
    a plaque of me and my sisters

    i'll put in the box something to remember me by
    and a white moon shinning donw on the HARD floor

    BY FAYE HARPER 3CH

    B.Y. E

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    1. johnbramstonprimary28 April 2013 at 10:19

      Well done Faye a lovely poem, great describing words and ideas.

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    2. Anonymous1 June 2013 at 16:46

      ow faye really good but don't big letters
      joshua

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  3. FAYE HARPER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!26 April 2013 at 20:11

    DO U LIKE MY POEM MISS CHEEK

    by faye

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  4. Anonymous27 April 2013 at 18:58

    I will put in the box
    A picture of my family.
    the taste of my favourite strawberry ice cream.
    the summer sair of flower.
    my favourite toy.

    Kusenthini

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  5. Anonymous28 April 2013 at 11:22

    I will put in the box

    In the Airplane going down the runway on the way to holiday.
    Playing cricket in the hot sun.
    Watching the clock go by while playing roblox's.
    Having a picnic in the summer sun.

    Billy

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  6. Mikael Stewart28 April 2013 at 12:29

    In my box I will put the first smile of my baby picture.The smell of beatiful milk chocolate.The sound of howling wolves.The feling of green slime. The taste of bublegum lolipops.I hope you enjoyed looking in my box.

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    1. johnbramstonprimary29 April 2013 at 21:01

      Some interesting ideas for your items, use a new line for each sentence of your poem Mikael. Well done

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  7. Anonymous28 April 2013 at 13:25

    I will put in the box
    My magical red footbal ball,
    The best one in the in the world,
    The sound of her:gooall!!
    Remember me how
    Good player i was.
    By Teo
    Enjoy my poetry!!!!!.
























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    1. johnbramstonprimary29 April 2013 at 21:03

      I enjoyed your poem Teo. I can tell you love football. Well done

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  8. Jacob Elsdon28 April 2013 at 13:27

    I will put in the box,
    The shiniest silver spear,
    From the depths of ancient China,
    I will climb Mount Everst while playing a guitar.

    I will put in the box,
    The silkiest sari,
    The first smile of a baby,
    And the black sun of Jerusalem.

    I will put in the box,
    A candy floss sheep,
    A Lion with the head of a Zebra,
    And a dragon with blue skin.

    I will put in the box,
    The bluest water,
    And the hottest desert,
    And the coldest snow from Antartica.

    That is what i will put in my box!

    Jacob Elsdon

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    1. johnbramstonprimary29 April 2013 at 21:04

      A fantastic poem Jacob, you have really understood the task. Well done

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    2. Anonymous31 May 2013 at 14:16

      good jacob thats a good poem well done he-he-he







      by indie

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    3. Anonymous3 June 2013 at 11:57

      awesome poem Jacob!!!! well done

      by Auria

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  9. Anonymous28 April 2013 at 14:42

    I will put in the box:
    A pretty beautiful face of my first smile.
    Three violet valuable wishes spoken in Tamil
    A golden cat of luck
    The yellowest sun shimmering in the sparkly ocean
    The white smell of chocolate

    By Sophieya

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    1. johnbramstonprimary29 April 2013 at 21:04

      Great word choices and ideas for you poem. Well done Sophieya.

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    2. Anonymous4 May 2013 at 19:12

      Thankyou mrs cheek

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    3. Anonymous26 May 2013 at 10:26

      sophieya wow your poem is amazing well done i really like i can just imagine what you are putting in your box!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!





      by indie

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    4. Anonymous3 June 2013 at 12:08

      WOW! sophieya your poem was amazing I can rlly picture
      it in my head

      by auria

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  10. avi28 April 2013 at 20:16

    I will put into the box

    the sweest mango
    the smell of tea
    a book
    a flame
    a picture of the big ben
    a wand
    a ball

    avi

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    1. johnbramstonprimary29 April 2013 at 21:06

      Some good ideas Avi, more description for you items would make you poem great. Read some of the ideas posted by the class.

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  11. Anonymous29 April 2013 at 20:22

    I will put in the box,
    a swishing silk sari,
    the first smile of a smiling baby,
    a photo of my family and friends,
    a colourful toy that moves around,

    I will put in the box,
    a black sun that is never known,
    a witch on a horse,
    a cowboy on a broom stick,
    a freezing snowball that you can't touch

    I will put in the box,
    the blue sea,
    the colours of the colourful rainbow,
    the taste of my favourite ice cream,
    a picture of me smiling,
    the swish of the Atlantic ocean,

    I will put in the box,
    the smell of chocolate,
    some beautiful red roses,
    a mythical creature,
    a warm blanket to keep us warm.

    Fariha Chowdhury (Y3CH)

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  12. johnbramstonprimary29 April 2013 at 21:13

    Fantastic poem Fariha, super word choices. Welldone

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  13. Anonymous29 April 2013 at 21:46

    I will put in my magic box
    the white snowflakes falling from the sky
    a romans fight cowboys of the west
    vikings sailing the voyage
    a giant digger diging chunks of ice
    the sound of the best drums


    by joshua elamparithi

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    1. johnbramstonprimary30 April 2013 at 20:44

      Great ideas for your poem, try to use the presentation format we have been using in school. Well done Joshua

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  14. Mehul sharma30 April 2013 at 19:58

    i will put in my box,
    a mountain 10 times bigger than Mount Everest,
    my fastest ball in cricket,
    the beautiful Galaxy.

    i will put in my box,
    volcano's that fire ice,
    ashes of burning metal,
    red lava.

    i will put in my box,
    a dangerous spell book made out of slime,
    the greenest slime from an alien's skin,
    the slime from a funny laugh of someone.

    i will put in my box,
    the best days with my best friends,
    my first day at john bramston,
    my days with my friends in spring and winter.

    my box is fashioned by,
    gold at the top and has written on it best friends forever,
    secrets about friends at the corners,
    sparkly glitter for the remaining parts.

    i will surf,play and remember the best moments john bramston.

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    1. johnbramstonprimary30 April 2013 at 20:42

      Mehul your poem is fantastic. Great ideas and emotive writing. Well done :)

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    2. Anonymous31 May 2013 at 14:15

      wow thats good mehul im in 3ch now nice to talk to you:)






      by indie

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  15. Anonymous7 May 2013 at 20:22

    Hello Mehul hoa are you in your new school have you get any marrit or fabs? have you engoyed John Bramston school?
    i am verry proud of your hands writing and your learning atancen (so well done).

    BY TEO

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  16. Anonymous8 May 2013 at 21:12

    Hello Mehul its me Teo again i forget to tell you,do you do any sport in your new school? good bye my best frind Mehul

    By TEO 3CH

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  17. Anonymous1 June 2013 at 16:44

    we miss you mehul
    joshua

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    1. Anonymous6 June 2013 at 18:10

      Well done Joshua for saing that to Mehul

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